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Leaving Home – Friday Fictioneers

February 25, 2015

THE DETAILS:
Friday Fictioneers: 1 picture, 100 words, scores of people from around the world sharing their creativity and vision. Feel welcome to join in; visit Rochelle Wisoff-Fields HERE to find out how.

THE PROMPT:
This week’s photo prompt courtesy of, and copyright by, Dawn Q. Landau who can be found HERE.

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THE STORY:

Leaving Home
I never liked Dixon from the first time mama brought him home. He never washed his hair and he smelled like Buddy smells when Buddy was wet. Mama called him “Uncle” Dixon but I knew he wasn’t my uncle. I told that to mama but she just told me ‘shush up’.

Dixon told me to shush up too. “You be a good girl now and don’t tell no one” he’d say. “Understand?”

I understood.

Leaving home wasn’t hard. The hardest thing was what to do with the screwdriver so I just left it sticking up out of Dixon’s left eye.

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28 Comments leave one →
  1. February 25, 2015 11:31 am

    Fabulous ending. It made me laugh.

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    • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
      March 2, 2015 7:06 am

      When I can make someone laugh that’s a good thing!

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  2. February 25, 2015 12:26 pm

    What en ending! Sounds like Dixon got what he deserved!

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    • February 25, 2015 12:27 pm

      *an …my fingers are too fat for the keyboard on my phone!

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      • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
        March 2, 2015 7:06 am

        He did and I understand those phone keyboards 🙂

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  3. February 25, 2015 1:29 pm

    Brutal!

    I’m impressed by how distinctive the narrator’s voice is. That’s nicely done.

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    • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
      March 2, 2015 7:07 am

      Thank you, Simon. I was hoping for something like brutal so I’m glad I was able to do it.

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  4. February 25, 2015 7:05 pm

    Seems like as good a place as any to leave the screwdriver. It seems extreme, but I guess it all hinges on the line “Don’t tell no one.” Nice job.
    -David

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    • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
      March 2, 2015 7:08 am

      Thanks David! What I realize now after the fact is that I never explained what he didn’t want her to tell anyone about. I suppose it might be obvious, but it’s not really clear.

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  5. February 26, 2015 3:22 am

    I agree with David above. Can’t think of a better place for it. Oh wait… yes I can. 😉 Good one Michael.

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  6. February 26, 2015 6:38 am

    Such a sad, rich story. Poor girl.

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    • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
      March 4, 2015 7:08 am

      Thank you for reading and commenting!

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  7. February 26, 2015 8:53 am

    Oh dear, I didn’t see that coming – nor did he.

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    • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
      March 4, 2015 7:09 am

      Or if he did he won’t see it again!

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  8. February 26, 2015 6:35 pm

    Dang! That was a a surprise ending. Much better than biting his ear! 😉

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    • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
      March 4, 2015 7:09 am

      Exactly! It’s never good to bite an ear; one never knows where they’ve been!

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  9. February 27, 2015 5:07 am

    Beautifully understated. Quite a story packed into those 100 words.

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  10. February 27, 2015 4:03 pm

    Ouch .. some get screwed for their screwing.. great surprising end.

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  11. February 27, 2015 6:37 pm

    Oww!… Nasty ending for…nasty conduct on Dixon’s part.

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    • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
      March 4, 2015 7:11 am

      Very nasty and very oww! Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  12. February 28, 2015 10:36 am

    Dear Michael,

    I guess the little girl got her point across. I like the way you used the prompt. 😉

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  13. February 28, 2015 4:32 pm

    I like the narrator’s voice in this. She tells the story so matter-of-factly. Dixon sounds a totally unsavoury character and got his just deserts at the end. The image of the screwdriver sticking out of his eye is really funny – in a macabre sort of way. Haha. Nicely done. 🙂

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  14. February 28, 2015 10:14 pm

    Good use of a screwdriver.

    Liked by 1 person

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