Skip to content

Nebraska – Friday Fictioneers

January 28, 2015

THE DETAILS:
Friday Fictioneers: 1 picture, 100 words, scores of people from around the world sharing their creativity and vision. Feel welcome to join in; visit Rochelle Wisoff-Fields HERE to find out how.

THE PROMPT:
This week’s photo prompt courtesy of, and copyright by, Ted Strutz, who can be found HERE.

on-on-off

THE STORY:

Nebraska

I’m the guy you never see. I’m the guy who puts the monsters to sleep. They don’t see me either which, I suppose, is maybe a bit ironic. In the end though, it really doesn’t matter; they’re brought to me primed and ready – or maybe not-so-ready – and I take care of the rest.

I plug in the cord and pull the handle and send someone like our friend Charlie Starkweather a thousand volts of electricity.

I’m the executioner.

I handle what you and society can’t. Oh, there’s a lot to debate there but I don’t have the time right now.

Please visit the other Friday Fictioneers by clicking the little blue frog below. You’ll find just about every type of genre you could imagine and some really creative writers.


Advertisements
23 Comments leave one →
  1. January 28, 2015 2:11 pm

    i had a thought like this at first, but then i drifted in a different direction. well done.

    Like

  2. January 28, 2015 2:11 pm

    also – fabulous song and album you added. one of my favorites.

    Like

  3. January 28, 2015 2:24 pm

    For some it’s just work I guess.. a work many wants done but few want to do…

    Liked by 1 person

  4. January 28, 2015 2:26 pm

    I love this. Great pacing.

    Like

  5. January 28, 2015 2:52 pm

    Great rhythm. Somebody else has written something similar today – I can understand how the image lead to this.
    Excellent commentary on society.

    Like

  6. January 28, 2015 5:38 pm

    You’ve captured the strong voice of this character. I do think the last sentence weakens the story. If you mean that he doesn’t have time because it’s time to get to work… that doesn’t quite come across for me in his comment.

    Like

    • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
      January 30, 2015 4:00 pm

      That’s an excellent point. Rereading it I agree that it’s not a very good end to the story. I maybe would have been better off switching the last two sentences around? or maybe just leaving out the ‘debate’ part altogether?

      Like

  7. January 28, 2015 10:31 pm

    That is a lonely job in many respects, I would think, to be an executioner. I like the line “puts the monsters to sleep.”
    -David

    Like

  8. January 29, 2015 1:16 am

    The voice in this was excellent; a kind of detached satisfaction, a voice devoid of emotion. Well done.

    Like

    • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
      January 30, 2015 4:01 pm

      Thank you, Sandra. I didn’t want to make him sound like it was something he enjoyed doing, but rather something that he *had* to do.

      Like

  9. January 29, 2015 11:32 am

    I also went the way of the electric chair but not as the executioner. Excellent take!

    Like

  10. liz2you permalink
    January 31, 2015 7:46 am

    You kept the secret well hidden, great idea! Liz

    Like

  11. February 1, 2015 1:52 am

    Very engaging story. I don’t mind the ‘debate’ part – it gave me the impression that the debate is so big he doesn’t have time to fully consider it – that he just gets on with the job. Maybe that’s not your intention, judging by your response to Sandra. His voice throughout is spot on – very convincing.

    Like

    • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
      February 1, 2015 4:15 pm

      Thanks, Margaret! My original intention was to have a guy who is anti death penalty but who makes his living as an executioner. That was way over 100 words and when I was trimming it down to meet the challenge I think that inner conflict (the debate part) got lost.

      Liked by 1 person

  12. February 3, 2015 5:59 pm

    Dear Michael,

    The voice in this is terrific….”I handle what you and society can’t.” A thought provoking line at its finest.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Like

    • Michael B. Fishman permalink*
      February 4, 2015 9:00 am

      Thank you Rochelle!

      Like

If you leave me a comment I'll give you a cookie!

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: