Friday Fictioneers: She Loved Lilies
Friday Fictioneers seems to be creeping up a little bit each week and not being one to pass up a chance to be creepy whenever possible, I’m creeping right along with them.
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This week’s photo prompt from Lora Mitchell
She Loved Lilies
We moved to the city after the wedding. Twenty-seventh floor overlooking downtown and the bay.
Angie loved the place; I loved Angie.
Winter nights in front of the fire we’d sit looking out the window watching snow cover the skyline.
She loved lilies; grew one in a pot on the windowsill.
We were content but in time she became familiar. Too familiar.
Familiarity breeds contempt and in time I stopped loving her.
They say killers return to the scene of the crime. With a videocam there’s no need for that. Not when I can recreate her last breath every night.
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I enjoyed how you went from perfectly lovely to perfectly creepy and all within such a short time.
janet
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Poor Angie. I enjoyed the sinister twist.
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That was some unexpected twist – really took me by surprise. Nice scene setting.
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from love to too familiar – good time to run before the familiar sets in
Well crafted
Thanks for the visit Michael
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Such an unfortunate twist. very well told
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i guess getting a divorce would be too much of a bother ^^ love the evil twist in this story…
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Have to laugh when I see kz’s comment, yes,she likes a bit of evil! This one qualifies for that as well…a video…oh dear!
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Oh that’s very creepy!
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Oooohhh. Snuck it in at the end. Very nice.
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So dark! Very engaging!
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Pretty vicious tale you’ve woven around those damned lilies. Perhaps Lilies breed contempt?
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Ouch!
Denmother
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ooh, creepy indeed. I didn’t see that coming until the final line.
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Dear Michael,
He couldn’t have just left? Pretty drastic solution to his problem. Well done with sinister twist at the end.
shalom,
Rochelle
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This was creepy. I guess he was one of those people who really enjoy other’s pain.
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Reason number 5,245,329,578 I will continue to stay single! Familiarize that! 😉
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Lovely dark twist at the end. So sinister that he would rather replay her last moments than their happy times. I’m beginning to suspect familiarity was just the excuse he was waiting for. Well done.
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I enjoyed the way the mood went from light to dark through this piece. Good story. 🙂
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Well, I’ve heard it said before: “Marriage is a lottery, isn’t it?”
I can’t say I “like” the ending, but you have certainly done a masterful job of story-telling here. You have shades of Edgar Allen Poe in the implication that he “enjoys” replaying her last breath.
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I really enjoyed how you presented this. What a piece of blackmail evidence that would be.
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What an unsettling character!. Hope he keeps his videocam close by.
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