Friday Fictioneers: Into the Light
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This week’s vertigo-inducing photo prompt courtesy of Jennifer Pendergast
Into the Light
I like staring into the light at the top of the stairs. I stare, and then squeeze my eyes
and see the colors. Red’s my favorite.
The red is wet.
Sometimes I don’t eat, and when they make me, I close my eyes and see them in red.
And I can taste them.
Don and Tami, they don’t know where I am. Don’s mean but Tami. she’s my friend. I
say she’s my girlfriend and she smiles. I like that. If she didn’t laugh I still wouldn’t hurt
her.
“Hello, Dwight. Ready to go back upstairs?”
“I’m ready, Doctor Tuft.”
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Michael B. Fishman
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I love it. I love it! That is all I can say. Just perfect little vignette.
Good work,
Lindaura
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very original take
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Dr. Tuft is nice. He doesn’t let Don hurt me. Plus he walks me back upstairs where I won’t slip on the red and encourages me to eat.
You created a world of insanity well, transitioning the reader back to reality, and for the main character a tenuous one at best. Nice job. I recognize that world well for many years of working in psychiatric institutions as a social worker (although some may argue that I have been on both sides of the fence).
Randy
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This is simply chilling. The voice is convincingly disturbed, and menacing at the same time. Really enjoyed it.
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That’s very realistic in its rambling monologue of insanity. Really good job.
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Very well done! Chilling and sad at the same time.
janet
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Eerie and powerfully written.
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Dear Mike,
You placed us deep inside the warped mind sitting waiting in the hospital. i for one am glad he’s in there and i’m just reading. Well done.
Aloha,
Doug
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Very original. Completely insane. I love the wet red – brilliant stuff.
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Well, that was interesting….
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Gave me the chills Mr. Fishman.
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Dear Mike,
You’ve packed a powerful picture of insanity into a tight (padded?) space. Not one word out of place. Bravo!
shalom,
Rochelle
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That was unexpected! What a take on the prompt! Wow!
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Enjoyed the contrast between the everyday (squeezing eyes to see red) and the different (And I can taste them). I’d like to hear more from this character.
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This is a really special glimpse into a “different” mind. Who’s to say he isn’t right about the red?
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I like the sensory descriptions here. It’s almost synaesthetic.
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This story gave me the shivers!
Well done,
Dee
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Oh that was very good – wonderful! You need just the right actor to play that just right!
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