100-word Flash for Friday Fictioneers
March 30, 2012
The prompt:
Write a 100-word story using the following photo.
The photo:
The Story:
The Split
Looking at the truck Henry Glover was content. The Chevy was where it wouldn’t be found for weeks, if at all. And if anyone did find it, the barbed wire and busted wipers would keep them away. He was happy he thought to flatten the tires, too, and he took that idea as a good omen. Henry grabbed the bag with the bank money and began the half-day walk to the highway where he’d catch a ride. Looking back only once he smiled thinking about his gift for the crows: his partner, Don, dead with a bullet to the head.
(Photo: Madison Woods)
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Michael B. Fishman
Michaelsfishbowl 
I do love a good tale of both larceny & betrayal, all wrapped up in a neat little package. Well told and a great match to the photo prompt.
My bloated offering is at: jeffreyhollar.com/2012/03/coming-home.html
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Very well done. Stolen money, betrayal and crows to get rid of poor Don!
Here is my take on it…http://blog.tompoet.com/?p=176
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Thanks for stopping by Michael…You said “tough story”. Did you find it hard to read?
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Not tough to read in the sense that it was difficult to follow or anything like that, but tough as in the subject matter.
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Wow, you packed a lot into this. Nice one, even though your main character doesn’t sound to be. Well done.
Mine’s at: http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/i-met-this-guy-friday-fictioneers-30-march-2012/
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Holy cow! Nasty fellow! Love it! Seemed to start slow, but built up to a great ending. Nice job!
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Wow, your character is a piece of work. I’d hate to meet this guy. Here’s mine: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/03/flash-fiction-grand-dads-truck.html
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Oh, ho–what a scoundrel! Wonderful story that’s a great hook for a full-length novel. Loved it!
Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html
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Well done, Michael. A dastardly little plot executed to perfection.
thanks for the kind words on mine.
here’s the link for others http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/
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Scoundrel is right. I didn’t see that coming. Really enjoyed it.
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🙂 A protagonist, who is a robber, traitor and murderer. What isn’t there to like about this story? Although I do not agree with his moral values, I think that story is well written and quite entertaining to read.
Here is the link to mine:
http://366degree.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/forget-him-not/
Cheers!
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My first thought: Holy fishsticks! You have a fish simulator on your blog!
My second thoughts: Very cool short story. I could more-or-less see where it was going from the beginning, but the details were still a bit surprising : )
Here’s mine: http://the-drabbler.com/rusted-race/
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Hey, nice to meet you…am among the new battery of writers.
This story is a great one…I love the gut rush and promise of adventure. May he never be caught. Well done!
http://seewilliams.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/iron-wall/
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NICE!!!
http://tedstrutz.com/2012/03/30/flash-fridayfictioneers-lost-opportunity/?preview=true&preview_id=795&preview_nonce=5782857aeb
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Heh. Your flash would work well with mine in a story!
http://rnfontenot.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/flash-fiction-friday/
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Solid. Reminds me the recent story in Pennsylvania where the armored car guy killed his partner and stole all the money in the car. Nice work.
My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/03/28/state-pride/
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I didn’t see the ending that you set up … I thought the guy was hiding the truck for some reason and was going to come back and get it, later. I thought that’s what you were going to tell us. Good surprise … and tight descriptions. With respect to my story … a stake truck is a flatbed truck with holes all around the perimeter of the bed for putting in wooden sides that convert it to a truck that can carry stuff.
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Very nice work. I’d love to see this as a novel.
My story: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/sins-of-a-father/
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And I’d love to write a novel! Thank you for stopping by, Brandon!
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What a gruesome twist. Very entertaining.
http://littlewonder2.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/friday-fictioneers-abandoned/
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I like gruesome 🙂 Thank you!
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Yikes!! What a dirty scoundrel, indeed. Creepy twist at the end. No guilt traitor. I hope I never meet him. Nice work. Here’s mine:
http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com
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Dirty scoundrels make for the best scoundrels! Thanks for reading, Lora!
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Dear Michael,
Quite a story yourself. Short, sweet and sardonic. Truck’s hid, Don’s crowbait and Henry’s got his hiking shoes on and a full backpack. Pretty slick operator, story and author.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thanks, Doug!
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I guess dead men don’t tell, LOL. That was a surprise ending and a great story. Thanks for joining us and hope you’ll come back this weekend too!
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I’m looking forward to tomorrow!
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