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I Miss You So

May 11, 2012

It’s Friday Fictioneers time again over at Madison Woods‘ place. Click and play!

How to play? See a picture, write 100 words, post, share and have fun.

A picture:

100 words:

My Dearest,

Ten years today. So many years and I miss you as much today as I did that first day. I knew it would be difficult but I never imagined that being apart from you could cause this much pain. I think only about being with you again. To hold you. To love you. To spend eternity with you.

I look out the window in my quarters every night from my cold outpost on Europa, through the trees in the biodome and the gas clouds beyond and find the star I know is earth and send you my love.

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  1. rochellewisoff permalink
    May 11, 2012 5:09 am

    Sweet piece of sci-fi and universal emotion. Mine is at http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com

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    • Michael Fishman permalink
      May 15, 2012 4:46 am

      Thanks for reading, Rochelle!

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  2. May 11, 2012 5:11 am

    A beautiful story told with emotion and yearning. I love it. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/fridayfictioneers-tanoas-baby/

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  3. May 11, 2012 5:20 am

    And this was very lovely indeed. Very compelling, just as that photo prompt was. I do love that lost in space milieu and find it part of a lot of our universal unconsciousness – and you have definitely tapped into it.
    Yours from Planet 9,
    Lindaura

    http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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    • Michael Fishman permalink
      May 15, 2012 4:49 am

      Thank you Lindaura! I often think of a universal consciousness but I’ve never thought of a universal unconsciousness.

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  4. TheOthers1 permalink
    May 11, 2012 5:26 am

    Sad. You conveyed all those emotions well. Distance that can’t be bridged leaves a terrible ache.

    My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/she-called-to-him/

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    • Michael Fishman permalink
      May 15, 2012 4:50 am

      It does indeed. Thank you for coming over and commenting!

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  5. Caerlynn Nash permalink
    May 11, 2012 5:40 am

    Wow! You really brought out heartfelt emotions. Well done!

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  6. May 11, 2012 5:50 am

    Aww, that was lovely, Michael. You are very direct and unaffected in your writing and I like it, find it very refreshing. Very nice.

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    • Michael Fishman permalink
      May 15, 2012 4:51 am

      Thank you for the kinds words Carlos!

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  7. Jeannie permalink
    May 11, 2012 7:32 am

    This is so attuned to the emotion of distant love and missing someone. Nice job!

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  8. May 11, 2012 7:36 am

    The scifi element parallelling history is a really neat idea.

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  9. May 11, 2012 7:41 am

    You did a great job conveying the sense of longing. Here’s mine: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/05/11/you/

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  10. May 11, 2012 8:14 am

    Initially I read it as the Moon calling to the Sun, her lover and then the second paragraph completely changed that – really nice.

    Thanks for your comment on mine and for other readers here is my attempt: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/11/friday-fictioneers-painting-creation/

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  11. Brandon Scott permalink
    May 11, 2012 8:20 am

    I’d like to know more about what they are doing on Europa and if they’ll ever return to their loved one. Nice story!

    My attempt: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/death-cart/

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    • Michael Fishman permalink
      May 15, 2012 4:59 am

      My guess is that they’ll probably never reunite. Thanks for dropping by and for the comment, Brandon!

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  12. May 11, 2012 9:16 am

    What I love about this is that you make the moon into Earth. I hope I caught that right… Anyway you’ve got such longing for the MC’s loved one. I found myself wanting the to reunite very soon. Great story, mine is here: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/friday-flash-fiction-birthing.html

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  13. May 11, 2012 2:55 pm

    I love that your character is on another satellite. The memories of Earth and the one this person loves so far away. Even though we experience this on a much smaller scale distance -wise, for lovers, it may as well be Europa and Earth, right?

    http://quillshiv.com/2012/05/11/the-first-world/

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    • Michael Fishman permalink
      May 15, 2012 5:03 am

      You’re right. It doesn’t matter if we’re next door or separated by light years. Love separated by distance is immeasurable. Thank you for reading and for your comment!

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  14. May 11, 2012 5:33 pm

    Those long distance realtionships are so hard. Nicely done evocation of longing for love here!
    Here’s my story: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/

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  15. Lora Mitchell permalink
    May 11, 2012 8:53 pm

    You captured the universal ache of yearning for a loved one who is so far away. Would love to know how he got to Europa and what he is doing there. Wonder if they will they ever be re-united. An original and unique take on the prompt. Here’s mine:
    http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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    • Michael Fishman permalink
      May 15, 2012 5:05 am

      Thanks, Lora! I imagine him to be just a regular guy. Some type of military/astronaut type who is stationed on that distant moon.

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  16. May 11, 2012 9:56 pm

    my! Talk about long distance relationships! Nicely done. The longing was felt clearly.

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  17. May 11, 2012 10:02 pm

    Talk about your long distance relationship? Great take on the picture.

    Here’s mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/10/friday-fictioneers-et-wannabe/

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  18. May 12, 2012 2:47 am

    A sci-fi romance, eh? Not often you see something like this, well done.

    http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/fridayfictioneers-moonlight-sonata/

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  19. May 12, 2012 6:13 am

    Very nicely done. Definitely would like to know more about their situation. From what you’ve written, I sense there’s a lot more you want to explore.
    Here’s mine: http://wp.me/p1Tjpv-aJ

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    • Michael Fishman permalink
      May 15, 2012 5:09 am

      Thank you. Yes, I could probably write more about these people if I had more than 100 words.

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  20. May 14, 2012 7:15 am

    This is a very sweet piece, I thoroughly felt for the lovers. Nicely done. One tiny concrit – “my cold outpost on Europa” sounds a tiny bit like esxposition, I think because quite a few words are devoted to it. Maybe you could just say “my cold outpost” and save the twist of “Earth” for the very end. Just a thought.

    I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/friday-fiction-halloween/

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    • Michael Fishman permalink
      May 15, 2012 5:14 am

      That’s an interesting thought. Leave out mention of Europa completely and have him some place far away, but unnamed?

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      • May 15, 2012 4:08 pm

        Just a suggestion, but it would be my preference. Especially because Europa could be confused for just some weird (futuristic or whatever) name for Europe, and not another world at all.

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